Coming of the Storm
When day is done and night falls soft,he comes to me from dreams aloft.Standing there, arms open wide,he beckons me to come inside.Without a word I know his thought,its in his eyes, their meaning...
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Julie,Ah, the power to calm a storm! Great opening lines, a poetic invitation to read on. Written as couplets, perhaps it would add a little more depth if arranged as 5 quatrains and one couplet at...
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Thanks so much for your input. I've only written a few poems and don't have a whole lot of time to write, let alone read up on whats right or wrong...I like how you broke it up a lot When I first...
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Wow! So nicely done...your poem expresses every single feeling before, during and after the "storm". I like the way you call it too...great word: storm. Excellent!Tais : )
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Hello jbugz so nice to read you.I love a good rhyme and one about loving, ya gotta like that! Ahem ( well at least I do lol!)I would like to mention the three 7 syllable lines amongst all those...
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Julie, I really enjoyed this and I agree with Wanda about building the "storm". It will really carry the reader through - wanting more!! Aren't storms wonderful Cheers Seaotter
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Hi, I am new here . but gotta say, LOVED THIS POEM . Makes me want to go wake up the old man . Great poem.Sharon "The mastiff momma" www.englishmastiff.com
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Hi there! I'm new here. This is my first critique, and what a pleasure for me to write it for this amazing poem!It's dark and sexy and very emotional. I look forward to reading more from you.
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